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"A flying saucer?" Marco said, laughing.

I could feel my heart pounding and my breath shortening as all sorts of possibilities came into my head.  What if they were here to make first contact and help build a better world, like the Vulcans on Star Trek?  What if they were here to eat us, like that episode of The Twilight Zone?  I heard a few sounds, but I was so lost in my own little world that I wasn't even paying attention. 

I can tell you that the ship wasn't exactly a flying saucer.  It wasn't really that big and it was about as long as a school bus.  The front end was a pod, shaped almost like an egg.  Extending from the back of the pod was a long, narrow shaft.  There were two crooked, stubby winglike things, and on the end of each wing was a long tube that glowed bright blue on the back end.

The spaceship looked harmless, save for the sharp pointed tail on the back of it.  I guess I was a little scared, but there was an excited girl in me screaming.

"We're about to make first contact with an alien life-form!"

Yeah, I ended up pulling a Homer Simpson and saying that out loud.

"I can see the headlines now, 'six kids disappear without a trace.  Authorities blame crazy ax-murderers, despite mysterious appearances of crop circles,'" Marco said.

Okay, that was actually funny, so I had to laugh.

"It's stopping," Rachel said, as the ship came down slower and slower.

"I think it sees us," Marco said.  "Should we run?  Maybe we should run home and get a camera.  Do you know how much money we could get for a video of a real UFO?"

"If we run, they might...  I don't know, zap us with phasers on full power," Jake said, jokingly.

"Phasers are only on Star Trek," Marco said, condescendingly.

A spaceship's landing right near us and the two cutest boys at my school are Star Trek fans.  This was the best day of my life.  It would also turn out to the worst.

"I think it's going to land," The blond haired boy said, the only one besides me who was grinning like mad.

"It's coming right at us!" Jake yelled, as the ship began to descend.

I could feel my heartbeat quickening to the point that I thought it would shut down.  This could be the most important event in my life and there was no way in hell I was going to miss it.  The fact that the others stuck around proved that they felt the same way.

"It isn't very big, is it?" I heard Rachel whisper.

"It's about­—" Jake began.  "—about three or four times as big as our minivan."

"We should tell someone," Marco said.  "I mean, this is kind of major, you know?  Spaceships don't just land in the construction site every day.  We should call the cops or the army or the president or something.  We'd be totally famous.  We'd get to be on Letterman for sure."

"No!" I said, my words coming out a little harsher than I intended.  "I mean, they'd perform experiments on him.  Like in E.T."

"You get that the alien might not be friendly?" Marco asked, in a condescending tone.  "And why do you assume it's a he?"

I could feel my entire face turn red.  Maybe I was romanticizing it a little, but what do you expect from a sci-fi geek?

"Karen's right," Rachel said harshly to Marco, as she put her hands on her hips.  "I think we should try to talk to it instead.  I mean, if that's even possible."

The blond haired boy nodded and stepped forward, holding out his hands.  I also stepped forward, wanting to see who would come out.  "It's safe," the boy said in a loud, clear voice.  "We won't hurt you."

"Do you think they speak English?" Jake wondered.

"It's all right," I said, to the alien.  "You'll be safe here."

I know, that was stupid.  You try making first contact with an alien life form and see if you do any better.

"Do you think they speak English?" Jake wondered.

"Well, everyone speaks English on Star Trek," Cassie said with a nervous laugh.

The boy tried again.  "Please, come out.  We won't hurt you."

I held up my hands to show that I carried no weapons with me.  I wanted to ask the aliens not to eat us, but I was afraid that it would give them ideas.

I know.

I froze.  I heard a voice, but it had no sound.  Like it was inside my head.  Was he telepathic?  Was is that all dream and I would wake up in my bed?  This all seemed way too fantastic to be real!  There was only one thing I knew for sure, the voice definitely sounded like a male.

"Did everyone hear that?" The boy whispered.

We all nodded at once, very slowly.

"Can you come out?" The boy asked, loudly.

Yes.  Do not be frightened.

"We won't be frightened," The boy said.

"Speak for yourself," Jake muttered, as the others giggled nervously.

"W-well, I won't be frightened," I said to the voice, nervously.  "And neither will...."

"Tobias," the boy said.

"Tobias," I finished, addressing the voice.

A thin arc of light appeared, a doorway, opening slowly in the smooth side of the pod part of the ship.  All I could do was stupidly stand there as the opening grew, like a crescent moon at first, then a full, bright circle.  And then he appeared.

At first glance, the creature looked like a centaur.  You know, those half-horse half-human creatures from Greek Mythology.  Except, this creature was covered with a mix of blue and tan fur and had three vertical slits where his mouth should've been.  His eyes were also abnormal, green with two eyes where they should have been and another two on top on what seemed like horns and they could move in any direction.  I'll say one thing, good luck sneaking up on this guy.  The most shocking thing was the tail, which was like a scorpion's, thick and powerful-looking with a curved horn or stinger that looked incredibly sharp.  You might think I'm weird, but the creature had a majestic, yet dangerous, beauty to him.

"Hello," Tobias said, gently, like he was talking to a baby and grinning his head off.

I have to admit that I was also smiling.  When I looked at the alien, I had a strange feeling.  Like he was supposed to land here and we were supposed to greet him.  I can't explain it but, at that moment, I knew he wasn't dangerous.

Hello, the alien said, in that silent way that you only heard inside your head.

"Hi," we all said back.

I held out my hand for the alien to shake.  "Welcome to Earth."

Thank you, The alien said, as he staggered, falling out of the ship to the ground.

Tobias tried to grab him and hold him up, but the alien slipped from his grasp and fell back to the dirt.

"Look!" Cassie cried.  She pointed at a burn that covered half the alien's right side.  "He's hurt."

Yes.  I am dying, he said.

"Can we help you?  We can call an ambulance or something," Marco said.

"We can bandage that wound," Cassie said.  "Jake, give me your shirt.  We can tear it up and make bandages."  I wasn't surprised that Cassie was coming up with solutions.  Remember when I said she lived on a barn?  Well, that's because both of her parents are veterinarians.  Though, I'm not sure if I'd classify this creature as an animal.

No.  I will die.  The wound is fatal.

"NO!" Jake cried.  "You can't die.  You're the first alien ever to come to Earth.  You can't die."

Jake voiced exactly what I felt.  The most magnificent creature I've, any of us, has ever seen and he was dying right in front of our eyes.  Okay, maybe Jake didn't feel exactly how I felt, but I was sure that no one wanted him to die.

I am not the first.  There are many, many others.

"Others?" I repeated, stupidly.

"Other aliens?  Like you?" Tobias demanded.

The alien shook his big head slowly, side to side.  Not like me.

I heard a silent cry of pain inside my head, putting my hand on it.  That horrible echo gave me a feeling.  Like I was actually feeling him dying.

Not like me, he repeated.  They are different.

"Different?  How?" Jake said.

Inside me, there were two conflicting emotions.  One was sadness about the alien dying and the other was joy about meeting a new race of creatures.  What he said next destroyed any joy I felt.

They have come to destroy you.

Once again, if you recognize it from Animorphs I don't own it.  I forgot to say in the last chapter that I will be using the same time period as the book series, which is late 90s.  I also marked this as an AU.  I know what thought speak's supposed to look like but, thanks to the rules of fanfiction, I had to find an alternative.  I know, this is just the first book all over again with a few words changed.  Still, I value your opinions.  The offer for cameos is still available, if anyone's interested.
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I finished this book today and was super excited to know that this is out. I would have liked this a bit more if it'd been less like the book and more like Karen, but this is good so far. I'll admit, I was a little disappointed to find that this was all the was, but I think is good. I'm sure you'll do great and I look forward to many more amazing chapters in the future. I'm really excited for when they meet Ax, so please hurry! But don't rush. I hope to learn more about Karen and her life, along with how she interacts with the others, so keep it up!
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
wow totally epic I love it
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
Thank you!  I was trying to make it believable that Karen would fall for Ax when she meets him.
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
You're welcome. She  does know that Tobias will be related to her if she, and Ax marry
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
Marriage is jumping the gun a little soon. Plus, I don't think anyone figured out Tobias was Elfangor's son.

I also didn't think Karen would know Tobias because he's a social outcast like her.
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
ah true

I'm not even sure they do in the books

Poor Karen, and Tobias
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
They do. Tobias found out in book 22.

It's a good thing they found Elfangor. Though Karen's life is nowhere near as bad as Tobias's is.
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
ah I need to read that one.

That's good. Maybe his will get better
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
Tobias is still getting stuck as a hawk.

It's an AU, but I'm still staying true to the series.
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed this! I'm serious. I loved the way Karen expressed her captivation caused by Elfangor and how deep it was. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015
Thank you!  Just wanted to make it believable that Karen will get a huge crush on Ax when he shows up.
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I definitely believe it. I could really identify with Karen's feelings. And I thought it was really adorable how she had those feelings towards him. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015
Thank you.  Karen is fascinated with Elfangor, but it's nothing more than that.  Though I am worried that I might accidentally create more believable chemistry for Karen and Marco, due to her having a slight crush on him.  Then making Karen look like a bitch because her crush on Marco ended when she meets Ax.
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
That's a really good idea. I was wondering if Karen would have a crush on Ax. I think they would make such a wonderful pairing.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015
Thank you.  Well, I said in the summary that the pairing is Ax/OC.  If you don't mind me asking, why do you think Karen's best suited for Ax?
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
They seem like they would understand each other - Karen being the most natural alien theorist out of all of them and Ax being sort of clumsy but lovable. That and the fact that Karen likes Andalites - which I think is really cute. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015
Thank you.  I'm still hoping I can get the chemistry right.  Spoiler alert.  Karen doesn't like having to be a Manic Pixie Dream Girl.  She feels it's the only way she can contribute to the group but, in her own words, it gets grating to have to be the Animorphs cheerleader all the time.  She also gets affected by the war by living each day like the next will never come.  So, she gets less cute as the story goes on.
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Mini-Wolfsbane Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Good work on this chapter. I have to agree with your critique, it could have been a bit more Karen-y, buuuut on the other hand, with short chapters like this one there's also only so much you can change sometimes too.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2015
Well, I didn't know how to go about that.
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Mini-Wolfsbane Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
It's okay! Writing is really hard sometimes. Don't mind anyone critiquing you, it just comes with the territory.
Like I said, there's only so much you can change with short chapters, so I was on your side and understood.
Sometimes what I say doesn't come across well, sorry.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2015
Thanks for understanding.  I have the same problem with what I say.
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Heartqueen14 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, this is getting interesting. ^_^
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015
Thank you!  Didn't know you read Animorphs.
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Heartqueen14 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I like to read it sometimes. Have you seen my other two chapter of Happy Bearth Day.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015
It's one of my favorites.  Even if the TV series absolutely sucked.

No, but I will check it out.
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Heartqueen14 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Okay. :)
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Knight-BIshop Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
love it, more please
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
What a coincidence. I didn't know I'd find you here. :) 
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Knight-BIshop Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
you know I love animorphs, how could I stay away
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Same here. I definitely can't stay away. And I love this artist's new character Mary Sue Fisher. She's a Controller and already I like her. 
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Knight-BIshop Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Agreed
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
You should also tell this artist how much you like Karen and Mary Sue. I think that'll encourage her. 
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Knight-BIshop Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
kay
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Same here. I definitely can't stay away. And I love this artist's new character Mary Sue Fisher. She's a Controller and already I like her. 
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Knight-BIshop Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Agreed
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015
Thank you.
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