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My name is Karen. I can't tell you my last name, or any of my friends' last names, where I live, or any of that. What I can tell you is that there's a secret invasion. I'm not talking about little green men from Mars with ray guns. I'm talking about Invasion of the Body Snatchers, the one with Jeff Goldblum and Leonard Nimoy. Except these aliens don't exactly create doubles, and they replicate your behavior perfectly. If I tell you anything more than the bare minimum, there is a great chance that they'll find me and my friends, something none of us want to risk. These invaders do have an enemy, but it will be awhile before they'll arrive. Until then, we'll have to do everything we can to stop the invaders or, at least, slow them down.

I was with Rachel and Cassie at the mall, shopping for clothes. I'm not much into clothes shopping and neither is Cassie but Rachel, Miss Fashionista, loved it. She picked out different outfits for me, Cassie and herself, trying them on or having us try them on. Rachel handed me the latest outfit she picked out.

"This will look great on you!" Rachel exclaimed.

I looked at the extravagant outfit and the places it was cut. Not only is it too much for me but, if I went home with that, my mom would have my head.   According to her, I'm not allowed to wear clothes like this until I turn eighteen.  Then I can wear whatever I want.  Still, Cassie wanted me to meet Rachel and I wanted to make a good impression.

"Okay," I said, nervously taking the outfit from Rachel and making a mental note to never tell my mom about this.

"I think we've shopped enough," Cassie said, giving me a sympathetic look.

"There's no such thing as shopping enough," Rachel said offended.

"I'll wear it, I don't mind," I said, smiling shyly.

"It's a trip for all of us," Cassie explained, looking at me understandably. "So I think that we should all get a chance to decide what we want to do."

Cassie turned to Rachel, who looked back with an apologetic look.

"All right," Rachel asked, turning to me. "What do you want to do?"

While Cassie was sympathetic and understanding, Rachel was like being in a Lion's den. You had to say the right thing or she would attack you. Maybe I'm exaggerating, but that's what it felt like.

Rachel and Cassie were polar opposites. While Rachel was the blonde haired, blue eyed, supermodel who dressed like she could be on the cover of the teen fashion magazines my half-sister, Tanya, loves, Cassie was a short haired African-America who dressed in casual clothes. As for me, I have long thick red hair that I work every morning to straighten, hazel eyes, freckles and my mom still picks out my clothes.  Luckily, my mom's got good taste, so I'm wearing flare pants and a pink T-shirt. Not as glamorous as how Rachel dresses but a little more fashion forward than Cassie's clothes.

I met Cassie when I was at the beach, watching the whales and dolphins swim by.  She was there to with her parents to check on a beached whale.  It turned out that we both loved animals and bonded over it.  Eventually, she invited me to her barn and we started hanging out. As for Rachel, this is the first time I've met her and she makes me nervous. She's too much like Tanya and we didn't exactly get along.

Okay, that's the understatement of the year. Tanya and I hated each other. Tanya was the Queen of the Campus while I was the geeky weird kid and believe me when I say that she used her power to make my school life miserable. When Tanya left, the new Queen didn't consider me worth her time and I became invisible. At first, I thought anything was better than being Tanya's whipping girl. Though, I have to admit, having your mom as your only friend gets a little lonely, not to mention loserish. This trip to the mall with Rachel and Cassie was my chance to stop being a wallflower.

"Well, where?" Rachel asked again.

"I'm not sure," I said.

I was being half-way truthful. I wanted to hang out at the bookstore, or the arcade, but Rachel wouldn't approve of either one. It's like Tanya always told me, popular girls like Rachel didn't hang out with dweebs like me. Sure, they'd pretend to like them in order to have a personal slave, but that was it. Even if Rachel tolerated Cassie's weirdness there's no way she would do the same for mine. So, I keep my interest in stuff like Star Trek, Final Fantasy and Pokemon a secret. I'll just talk about stuff like Friends, Will and Grace, yoga, animals and possibly cooking.  Is cooking considered geeky. In the case of animals, I'll just talk about the cute cuddly ones, like puppies and kitties. That way, Rachel won't know that we belong to different social groups. As for Cassie, all she knows about is my love of animals.  So I think I should be safe. I looked at my watch.

"It's getting late," I said, grateful for the time. "I think we should head home."

"Okay, I didn't find anything worth buying, anyway," Rachel agreed.

Cassie sighed in relief. We headed for the exit and spotted three guys, one of them I knew as Jake. Well, I didn't really know him, but I knew of him. Jake was Rachel's cousin. The strong-looking guy with brown hair and dark eyes who always has a serious look on his face. Half of the girls in school had a crush on him and I've heard Cassie mention him a few times, so she was definitely not the exception.

The other half had a crush on his best friend, Marco. He had long brown hair, a dark complexion and a reputation as the class clown.

"Don't think I've seen you before," Marco said to me with that air of confidence and a smile that looked almost flirtatious. "Name's Marco."

"I-I'm Karen," I said, looking at my shoes.

Was he flirting with me? No, he was probably just being nice to me. Guys don't find me attractive, especially the ones like Marco.

"Are you nervous?" Marco asked me. "A cute girl like you shouldn't be nervous."

"Th-thank you," I said, looking up to meet Marco's eyes and turning away again, feeling my whole face turn red.

Can you blame me?  He said I was cute!  No guy has ever said that to me before!

"Back off, Marco," Rachel said, her tone showing that she meant business.

So, he was flirting with me and "Miss Popular" didn't like it. Did she have to have all the guys?

"What's the matter, jealous?" Marco teased as he winked at me.

Cute guy's winking at me!  Cute guy's winking at me!  I'm dreaming, nobody pinch me!

"Don't flatter yourself," Rachel shot back as she rolled her eyes.

It could be that he liked Rachel and was using me to make her jealous. Still, he thought I was attractive and my mom always said that I need to get over Josh. He's my half-sister's boyfriend, football quarterback, blond hair, blue eyes, strong built. He was a dream boat that neither Jake, Marco or the third guy could live up to. Josh was the love of my life, but he only thought of me as Tanya's kid sister.

Oh, I forgot to mention that there was a third boy with us. He was a boy with straggly blond hair who looked out of place next to Jake and Marco. He was the one kid I've never seen before, and I certainly didn't know him through reputation.

"Karen?" Jake asked with an air of familiarity. "You're Tanya's sister?"

"Yeah, that's me," I said, slightly angry. "And I'm guessing you're Jake, Tom's brother."

All right, maybe that last part was a little mean, but you try living in your sibling's shadow and not letting it get to you.  Okay, he didn't call me Tanya's weird sister.  So I maybe I shouldn't have done that.  Thankfully, Jake only nodded his head.

"So, you guys going home?" he asked, turning his attention to Rachel. "You shouldn't go through the construction site by yourselves. I mean, being girls and all."

Was he serious? Yes, it was dangerous for young girls to walk through the construction site, but it's not like it was any less dangerous for boys.

"Are you going to come and protect us, you big, strong m-a-a-a-n?" Rachel said, I gave her a smile that she returned. "You think we're helpless just because —"

"I'd appreciate it if they did walk with us," Cassie interrupted. "I know you're not afraid of anything, Rachel, but I guess I am."


Though I did agree with Rachel about Jake's stupid bravado, I was also afraid of walking through the construction site.

"It's like they say, safety in numbers," I said, nervously.

Great, I probably sounded really stupid. The third boy just smiled.

"Yeah," He said, sounding just as nervous as I was.

He seemed like one of those kids who's only friend was his mother.  So I imagine that he was probably happy that he got to hang out with Jake and Marco, desperate for them to like him. I felt the same way around Cassie and Rachel. Plus, that boy seemed a little too interested in Jake. I think he's gay. Not that I have a problem with that, but it wasn't exactly popular. Just like being a Star Trek fan. Okay, not the same thing but I could understand what he was going through, a little.

We finally got to the construction site, which was a big abandon area surrounded on two sides by trees, with the highway separating it from the mall area. In the middle of the construction site and the nearest houses was a broad open field. I'll admit, I was a little scared to walk through it and, when I left to hang out with Cassie and Rachel at the mall, my mom gave me several lectures about taking the longer safe route instead of going through the dangerous path just to get home quicker. Personally, I think it's safer to travel through a dangerous place with company than to travel the safer route alone. I mean, what's the worst that could happen?

What happened next changed my life forever. At the time, I didn't know it because I was too busy trying to keep my wits about me. Plus, I've been addicted to The Twilight Zone and the episode about the doll that came to life was still fresh in my mind. I felt something against my leg and shrieked, getting the attention of everyone around me except for the blond boy who was staring at something in the sky. Then I saw something that looked like a rat vanish into the shadows.

"Sorry, false alarm," I said, feeling really stupid.

"Look," the blond haired boy said, pointing to something in the sky.

I couldn't help but wonder what it was he found so fascinating and looked up to see a brilliant blue-white light that scooted across the sky, going slower and slower.

"Wow," I said in pure amazement.

"What?" Jake asked.

"Just look," I said at the exact same time as the blond haired boy.

I couldn't take my eyes off of that star, so I don't know if the others looked up as well.

"What is it?" I heard Jake ask.

"I don't know," the blond haired boy answered.


I knew what it was but I didn't say anything. What if I was wrong and it turned out to be a weather balloon? Everyone would laugh at me. Cassie just blurted it right out.

"It's a flying saucer!"
Update: I did some editing and put the stuff I took from the books in italics.  If you recognize it from Animorphs, I don't own it.

I'm working on a couple of Willy Wonka stories and a Lorax story, but this plot bunny won't leave my head. So I thought I would write the first chapter and get it out of the way, and then continue my other stories.  I wanted to continue to when Elfangor comes out and gives everyone morphing powers, but this is where K. A. Applegate ended the first chapter, so this is where I will end it. I have a confession to make. I never read the entire series, because I stopped due to thinking I was too old for it. I also can't remember everything I've read, because it's been so long. That's why this fanfic will be on hiatus until I finish the series in its entirety and find a beta-reader. I also plan on re-writing this chapter after I'm done with all that. You'll be waiting a good long while. Anyway, I'll also let you create a character for a cameo in my fanfic, if you want. Just review about it, and we'll work out the details. I promise to give you the credit for it.  If you recognize it from Animorphs, I don't own it.  Just a little warning, the pairing seems like Marco/OC, but it will change to Ax/OC.
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This makes me feel like I'm reading the books! So far, it's just introducing your character and the others, but I feel like I could see it. Maybe it's just my imagination, but you have great writing techniques. It makes me feel like I'm there. Now, I would have liked more of a set up for her life before this, but I think what you did was pretty good. The Animorphs would be hard to write about. Overall, I think this is a great first chapter and I hope to see many more like it. Keep up the great work!
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onlyindreams145 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2016
I'm so excited to see you will be going back your Willy Wonka story and this was so well written, I'm excited tp see Ax
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2016
I didn't know you've read Animorphs. Hate to disappoint you, but that author's note was written a long time ago. I'm all about Deep Space Nine right now.
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onlyindreams145 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2016
I've read bits and pieces but not much else
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2016
It was one of my favorites growing up.
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
Cute I love the Animorph series, and this is outstanding
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
Thank you!  I like Rachel better, but I thought it would be more believable for Karen to know the group through Cassie.
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
You're welcome. possibly
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
I should tell you. Words like possibly tend to make me paranoid.
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
sorry.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
No need to apologize. It's just that I'm very particular about my writing. I'm always worried I screwed something up.
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wolfdemongirl13 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
ah ok I don't think that you screwed anything up
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Okay, thank you.
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice work! :) I thought it was true to the spirit of the novel and Karen sounds like such an interesting character - very sweet and kind yet very assertive as well. I might work on a critique of this too. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015
Thank you! As Mary-Suish as it sounds, Karen's based on me at that age. Though, I don't think she'll be hiding her interests for long. I mean, come on, she's surrounded by like-minded people. Karen might start to get annoying, because I plan on making her a Manic Pixie Dream Girl and the Animorphs cheerleader. I also plan on looking over these chapters and editing them. I have a tendency to rush and be impatient.

I look forward to seeing it. Can I ask you a question?
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Sure. Ask away. :) 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015
What is it about my stuff that appeals to you? I mean, I knew I'd have a following among girls due to writing mostly romances and having female characters as the star, but I never imagined gaining any male fans. No offense.
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh it's okay. :) I was actually kind of drawn to the girl characters and their personalities. As a male it's interesting to read what goes on in a girl's mind and heart. I really liked the characters Karen and Mary Sue not only because they looked cute but also because I wanted to know more about their personalities and emotions. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015
Must be disappointing to know that we're just like everybody else. Joking.

Thank you. I try to flesh out my characters as well as I can and not end up writing a Twilight knock off. It's good practice for my original fiction, which I hope you'll also check out.
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LittleGreenGamer Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Being unique is fun, isn't it? :D 

I'll be sure and check out all of your other works. And I'm sure you'll do a great job writing more of it - and keeping it from turning out like Twilight. (I'm not putting down Twilight or anything) Some of my characters in Animorphs fanfics tend to get a little overboard with romance and emotion to be honest. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015
Yeah, but it's my aspergers that makes me unique, not my gender.

Thank you. In the mean time, I'll be sure to check out yours.
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MyMelodyOfTheHeart Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
This absolutely takes me back to reading the Animorphs book series again. :) I love how you established your original character in a good amount of detail, as well as  bringing in the characters from the original series. This chapter started out pretty slow, in my opinion, but it quickly picks up the pace towards the end. I enjoyed reading this and I hope you write more of it. :heart: 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015
Okay, thank you.  I think I already have three chapters of it out.
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My pleasure always. :) 
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Mini-Wolfsbane Featured By Owner Edited Apr 24, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Pretty good.  You painted a good picture of Karen and her life. Hopefully in future chapters she'll come out of her shell more (I mean, come on, most of the Animorphs are trekkies-or near it-in cannon, so she's with fellow fans! No need for her to be shy amongst fellow geeks.)

Anyway, I enjoyed it. It's interesting rewriting and tweaking cannon history (or future) to include your own OC.
Karen sounds like an good character and seems to have the traits of many girls/nerds; Introverted, keeps her interests to herself, unpopular (but not by choice), and has hobbies not "typical" of the average girl. Sounds like she's inbetween Cassie and Rachel clothes wise. Not a fashion plate, but not as fashion challenged as Cassie. Love that you gave her realistic, difficult hair.  Not all of us have nice hair and it's great your character reflects this. Anyway, Looking forward to her getting character development and her relationship with Ax! Sounds cute. I enjoy Andalite/human pairings.

Hope you finish the books, because they were and will remain awesome. They simply have no age limit. Back when they were out, I got my mom into them and now I'm just now hitting my 30s (ewww!) and I'm working on the Hork-Bajir chronicles, as well as going back to re-read other books in the series.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2015
You never know it by looking at them, Tobias might be an exception. That's what I love about this series, no one is who they appear to be, both figuratively and literally.

Karen's based on myself at that age. Good, I wanted her to be the in-between girl. Thank you for the comment and fav!

I do plan on finishing it and am on Megamorphs #1. I also have to re-buy some books because I lost some of them. It's going to be a long while until I'm done.
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kaafan10 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015
it is honestly good
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015
Thank you.
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no problem
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